Writing Goals
I will work on my word choice in my writing. In my in-class essay, Ashley gave me a few critiques on making stronger word choices. For example, in paragraph 5 I had said, “Creating a sustainable classroom will give us a good class culture”. However, I changed that “good” to “positive” to make this sentence feel more formal and I believe it has a nice flow in it. To make my word choice better I could read my writing aloud to see if it is as strong a word as I hope and if it shows the emotion I’m trying to get across. I could also have other people read and critique my writing and tell them to specifically look for word choice so that my peers can help me strengthen writing. When I see a word that could be changed I can use a thesaurus if I need help picking a new word.
I want to make my introductions stronger. In my in-class essay, I was given feedback on my introduction because it didn’t give very clear context as to what my essay would be about. My college essay also needed refinement in the introduction because it needed a stronger hook. My hook started as, “While I pack I begin to realize my trip is coming to an end.” Then I changed my hook to, “It’s amazing how denial can make you lose your sense of time.” with the help of Ashley. This made my introduction stronger and more interesting with a one-liner. I can work to improve my introductions by getting peer feedback and by reading aloud like with my word choice. Also, I can use Ashley’s advice and after writing a rough draft and I can try to make sure I have a clear message I’m trying to get across and summarize it into a strong one-liner.
The last of my three writing goals is to work on my transitions. In my college essay, I was having a hard time transitioning into one specific paragraph where I was trying to show that I was moving from speaking in the past to the present. After working with Ashley and trying out a few different ways to transition we landed on, “I snap back from my walk down memory lane as Ali runs up to me and I throw him over my shoulder one last time.” (par 5). In order to make my transitions stronger, like this one, I can try to use imagery to show where I am and what’s happening in the new section. I can also reference previous paragraphs to make the connections clear. As well as, like everything else, having others review my work to help me improve.
I want to make my introductions stronger. In my in-class essay, I was given feedback on my introduction because it didn’t give very clear context as to what my essay would be about. My college essay also needed refinement in the introduction because it needed a stronger hook. My hook started as, “While I pack I begin to realize my trip is coming to an end.” Then I changed my hook to, “It’s amazing how denial can make you lose your sense of time.” with the help of Ashley. This made my introduction stronger and more interesting with a one-liner. I can work to improve my introductions by getting peer feedback and by reading aloud like with my word choice. Also, I can use Ashley’s advice and after writing a rough draft and I can try to make sure I have a clear message I’m trying to get across and summarize it into a strong one-liner.
The last of my three writing goals is to work on my transitions. In my college essay, I was having a hard time transitioning into one specific paragraph where I was trying to show that I was moving from speaking in the past to the present. After working with Ashley and trying out a few different ways to transition we landed on, “I snap back from my walk down memory lane as Ali runs up to me and I throw him over my shoulder one last time.” (par 5). In order to make my transitions stronger, like this one, I can try to use imagery to show where I am and what’s happening in the new section. I can also reference previous paragraphs to make the connections clear. As well as, like everything else, having others review my work to help me improve.
